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To you my heart is a revolving door,
It lets you come and go as you please.
And just when I think you're going to stay,
You disappear without a word again.
It seems that whenever I need you,
You're never there.
And when I don't need you,
You're always here.
Why can't you make up your mind,
To either stay or go?
I don't know how much more I can take,
Or how much longer I will wait.
I beg of you to tell me the truth,
No more lies or secrets.
Do you have feelings for me?
Or do you just enjoy toying with my heart?
In the end my heart is still a revolving door,
Letting you come and go as you please.
By Heaven's Star
It lets you come and go as you please.
And just when I think you're going to stay,
You disappear without a word again.
It seems that whenever I need you,
You're never there.
And when I don't need you,
You're always here.
Why can't you make up your mind,
To either stay or go?
I don't know how much more I can take,
Or how much longer I will wait.
I beg of you to tell me the truth,
No more lies or secrets.
Do you have feelings for me?
Or do you just enjoy toying with my heart?
In the end my heart is still a revolving door,
Letting you come and go as you please.
By Heaven's Star
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A poem about Gin and Rangiku from Bleach.
The poem is from Rangiku's point of view.
Bleach belongs to Tite Kubo.
Enjoy! And feel free to comment!
(Heaven's Star is my pen name)
The poem is from Rangiku's point of view.
Bleach belongs to Tite Kubo.
Enjoy! And feel free to comment!
(Heaven's Star is my pen name)
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wow 
ohman
I'd tell you you're a poet, but you seem to be already aware of it!!
ohman. That was so tender, it really reflected all of the tweaks her heart must have been feeling when she was around Gin (and away from him). This was fantastic!!
It seems that whenever I need you,
You're never there.
And when I don't need you,
You're always here.
I lovelovelove this part, but I feel it's a bit... repetitive. I understand you were trying to use repetition to keep the flow on correctly, and to add a touch of uniqueness to it, but maybe the second part could be worded differently to say the same thing? Just a suggestion.
It's fine if you just leave it though, it's still super beautiful :'D
ohman
I'd tell you you're a poet, but you seem to be already aware of it!!
ohman. That was so tender, it really reflected all of the tweaks her heart must have been feeling when she was around Gin (and away from him). This was fantastic!!
It seems that whenever I need you,
You're never there.
And when I don't need you,
You're always here.
I lovelovelove this part, but I feel it's a bit... repetitive. I understand you were trying to use repetition to keep the flow on correctly, and to add a touch of uniqueness to it, but maybe the second part could be worded differently to say the same thing? Just a suggestion.
It's fine if you just leave it though, it's still super beautiful :'D